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sea like a mirror
sails drowse useless as rags
smoke rises vertically
ask me how high the waves
—not a one on this painted sea
1
ripples and light airs
water like mackerel scales
and on shore
smoke drifts shows the way
(wind vanes unmoved)
2
call it a breeze now
a cat’s paw, gentle wavelets
with glassy crests
yes, that’s wind on your face
leaves shift and wind vanes creak
3.
almost at ten knots
this breeze pushes large wavelets
a few white horses
leaves move, even little twigs
those once furled flags extend
4
surely more-than-a-breeze
made these small waves cohere
freed white horses
raised dust and loose papers
and moved small branches
5
finds freshening winds
with many white horses
(galloping herds?)
occasionally spray
small trees in leaf begin to sway
6
a strong breeze drives
largish waves, likely there’s spray
foam crests everywhere
whistling down telegraph wires
—umbrellas buck, hats fly orf
7
now the sea heaps up
foam blown along in streaks
spindrift (from the scots)
whole trees, hillsides in motion
walkers lean comically
8
here at last a gale
edges of wave crests break
foam is blown along
in well-marked streaks
and twigs on trees | snap
9
a strong gale: high waves
streaks of foam flying
sea begins to roll
chimney pots and roofing slates
gone (gone? )
10
as storm or whole gale
very high waves with long
overhanging crests
the sea’s surface is white
trees down, some houses lost
11
violent storm
exceptionally high waves
small and mid-size ships
may be lost to view
widespread damage
12
hurricane's scream
air filled with foam
seas completely white
I’m blinded by driving spray
and on land
devastation
Image: Yachts on Warrane (Port Jackson), 2 January 1941, PIX magazine Sailing series, from original negative, State Library of New South Wales on Flickr. A tanka series inspired by an audio piece, A Mirror Featuring Steve Urquhart played on BBC Short Cuts.
And for music this morning (bear with me) here’s Trio Ramberget – with 24 ways volume 1 (and here’s volume 2). (Youtube). Mesmerising meditations with bass clarinet, trombone and double bass.
These are just wonderfully descriptive and absolute perfection. Nicely done, Peter.
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Thanks so much. The wording of the scale is quite poetic too – phrases like ‘trees in leaf’.
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You are so clever with this form.
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As a person who sails, these are wonderful
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Beware of what you wish for! Like a Richter Scale for water/air turbulence. Having lived near Lake Michigan all my life I’ve seen every number on the scale except #12.
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(i’d whisper that if I were you) – it’s a pleasant five or six here today.
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❤
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This is so cool, Peter. Beautifully described. And it brought to mind immediately Typhoon Koinu with its record winds. The last line break works very well too.
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Powerful in subject and form!
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